Wattpad Reviews: Getting Into Hogwarts, Enigma & Victoria's Forbidden Kisses
3 S T A R S
Nice pace and interesting voice. This novel has just the right length as well as the amount of information that was given. The coherence is strong and the delivery is also on-point! There are some punctuation and there are clauses that need to be separated with a comma. It is also advisable to limit your lines per paragraph to 6 as maximum. This is for the reading quality and visual presentation.
This is well-delivered in terms of thought.
4 S T A R S
The first chapter has a great run and I can read through it until I finished the whole part. I can see the direction of the story and I believe that it's heading towards a good line However, the approach should be re-thought or maybe re-constructed. As I mentioned earlier, the direction is vivid for me; the intention of the said chapter is clear.
Parker is a very mysterious character indeed. Sometimes he's creepy and other times he's just plain sweet that makes him interesting as hell. The chapters are growing great and steady; being consistent on the strengths and re-modeling what's weak. Good job on the development!
3 S T A R S
Awesome pace and interesting plot development. Your characterization is amusing as well as your introduction for Mr. Sobitan, which is put creatively. I love the humor and the interesting-aspect of this chapter. The in-medias res device also appeared to be effective. The description of both characters are vivid and appealing.
There are just some punctuation issues that need to be resolved. It is also advisable that the paragraphs have maximum of 6 lines only. The delivery of the flashback can be improved by italicization instead of embolden names of the characters, which looked like a script.