Wattpad Review: Ebby Flint and the Sword of Sorrows @STAlbert [Part 1]
- Fern Risher
- Jul 24, 2016
- 2 min read
Ebby Flint never thought she would have to save the new world, Artis. And she definitely didn't think her cat, Sir Fluffs would be the one to lead her there, but here she is. Learning to control her new powers and leading an entire army in search of the Sword of Sorrows, leaves Ebby Flint with a new life. Join her on her adventure to defeat the unknown evil surrounding Artis. _________________________________ I'm no longer the Ebby Flint I used to be. I'm not a high school student. I'm not Terri and Derek's daughter. I'm not Marcus's best friend. I've been stripped of those titles, but I've gained new ones. I am the daughter of Rowan and Juliana. I belong to the Kingdom of Artis. And I am a witch.
C H A P T E R 1
* * * 3 . 5 Stars!
{Positives} I liked the following in this chapter:
1. The entrance/ first part: It was just very interesting and good to read. The first part will have you reading for more.
2. How the author inserted some bits and parcels of information in between the dialogues. It was smooth and not on purpose.
3. Ebby's conversation with her mother. It was very enigmatic and it will draw one's attention on the chapter. I'm sure the readers' minds will go active and will have different assessments and hypothesis on events.
{Negatives} The drawback I found in this chapter is the mid-part. I don't know, but I feel that some readers will lost their interest in the chapter during that part. I also found it too rushed when the cat spoke. Not because it was too early, but the element surprise is quite lacking.
{Inner-queen} I knew it! I knew it! I knew it! I really think your idea has a potential, but it still needs a little more "oomph" or "push" factor.
C H A P T E R 2
* * * 3 Stars!
{Positives} I liked the following in this chapter:
1. The Alice in Wonderland plus Oz the Great and the Powerful kind of feels. 2. The idea of the story-- I know this can go very exciting if written perfectly.
{Negatives} I like fast-paced stories, but I feel that this one is quite so rapid. There are parts that would be better if not skipped, rather should be shown instead. Also, it just seems to me that Ebby is acting so calm despite all the weirdness happening to her already.
{Inner-queen} I love it's adventure nature!!! But there's some lacking bits while I read this chapter. I hope to see more.
C H A P T E R 3
* * * 3.5 Stars!
{Positives} This chapter was pretty exciting! Ebby finally get into some sort of action and I'm kinda waiting for this to happen though. I like the author's train of thought-- it's very unique and vivid.
{Negatives} There were too much dialogues that some of it would be better if translated as descriptions or narrations. Same same issues as I've said beforehand.
{Inner-queen} Okay, we're starting the action, now! This book never cease to have me expecting for more. More, more! Chapters 4 and 5 proceed here.
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